Hey, Mom! Talking to My Mother #455 - How to Write a Persuasive Essay Part Five - "because-should thesis, part two"
I am back once again with the next installment in my series on writing persuasive essays. I am hoping that actual students with whom I am sharing these links actually migrate here and visit this very spot.
I am adding to and modifying this from the original, so students who may have examined the "How To Write a Persuasive Essay Web Site Final Project" will see new material herein.
I still think of your schooling, Mom, and helping you with your work. You were such a good student. I discussed these memories in previous installments, see forthcoming links.
Here are the links to the previous four installments of this feature.
How to Write a Persuasive Essay Part One
How to Write a Persuasive Essay Part Two
How to Write a Persuasive Essay Part Three
How to Write a Persuasive Essay Part Four
As I wrote in part four, I defined a formula for writing a thesis. I call this formula the "because-should thesis" based on its sentence construction (a subordinated sentence with a "because" clause and a "should" verb in the main clause) and how it sets up a problem-solution essay.
Not all thesis statements need to use my formula, but it will help students who are struggling to formulate a thesis statement in early composition classes. Some narrow-minded and old-fashioned instructors may balk at the use of the word "because" to lead the sentence (though the formula can be applied in the "should-because" order), but there's nothing grammatically wrong with the set up as I have described it.
BENEFITS OF BECAUSE-SHOULD FORMULA
- Describes problem AND solution
- Creates a complex sentences as your thesis
- USES DETAIL IN YOUR THESIS STATEMENT
- preview SUBJECT & topic sentences = essay map
THESIS is usually the last sentence of the introduction.
EVERY THESIS SHOULD CONTAIN
- Both a definition (and argument) of the problem and an argument for the solution.
- My because-should method automatically sets up problem and solution both in the thesis.
- An essay map - parts of the argument.
NOTE ON USE OF LANGUAGE: WHOLE PAPER SUBJECT = SUBJECT
TOPIC = TOPIC SENTENCES = PARTS OF THE SUBJECT
2. POSITION AND ONE SENTENCE: Is the thesis statement the last sentence of the introduction? Are all the parts of it (problem/solution and essay map) all expressed in one sentence? (My because-should method works best for this).
5. BECAUSE-SHOULD FORMAT - Not all thesis statements need be expressed in BECAUSE-SHOULD format, but they will be better for it.
Is your thesis expressed as a problem and solution. IE. Because of this problem, we should institute this solution.
Does your thesis have an essay map? Is there a preview of the topics that will be explored in the essay, topics to develop and make the thesis argument?
SAMPLE THESIS (The following is not a very good thesis. It's simply designed to show use of #s 3 and 4 above in a single thesis statement. I could do better if I wrote a REAL thesis on this subject).
Because Marijuana is the highest grossing cash crop in the United States, The U.S. government should legalize marijuana.
A BETTER THESIS EXAMPLE WITH THE BECAUSE-SHOULD FORMULA:
Because office politics can damage employee morale, destroy productivity, and even ruin a company's reputation, companies should provide team building programs and interpersonal communications training twice a year.
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