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Wednesday, May 31, 2017

Hey, Mom! Talking to My Mother #694 - Academic persuasive essay writing roundup with thesis - How to Write a Persuasive Essay - part nine

Hey, Mom! Talking to My Mother #694 - Academic persuasive essay writing roundup with thesis  - How to Write a Persuasive Essay - part nine

Hi Mom,

Since I want to share my persuasive essay writing posts with my students, I felt it was time for a round up and a few additional remarks.

If you're a student of mine, Hi, look around the blog. Tell me what you liked.

If you're not a student of mine, but you found this page in your searching, Hi, also, leave me a comment, prove that you're not a robot.

Whoever you may be, dear reader, the list of links to all my posts in this series plus a link to the category can be found by scrolling down.

My goal with this entry is to give some round up to the series thus far and some thoughts on the thesis materials one can find as first results in a Google search.

Chris starts his "introduction" by breaking two rules

So, let me start my general remarks by breaking one of the most important rules of essay writing, which is narrating what I am doing. This whole "let me start my remarks" nonsense is just that -- malarkey. If I start remarks, then they are started, and since I am obviously writing them, I hardly need to tell you readers that I am doing so.

But I have an out clause here, which is that this is my blog, and I can break "rules" of essay writing because, strictly speaking, this is not an essay.

Another "rule" I am breaking is the one against the use of the second person in directly addressing the reader. Generally, unlike magazine features which use the technique all the time, in academic writing, one should avoid the use of the second person pronouns and refrain from directly addressing the reader. See this to prove to my students that I am not lying.


This blog is special. As I designed the Hey Mom blog feature as a continuation of conversations with my mother, I routinely address, you, Mom, this way. But since I know other readers, other than my Mom, read this blog, I am clear to distinguish when I mean you, Mom, and you, the reader who is not my Mom.

Some general thoughts on thesis and the image up top

When I started today's post, I want searching for an image for the top, which is part of my format (and is a common blog format). I found the chart, which I will repeat here with its link.

FROM - https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/persuasive-thesis-statement-examples/

This chart hits many highlights about writing thesis statements -- a feature which is the core element of any academic, persuasive essay -- that I also emphasize in many of my eight previous posts on this subject (see below for list of links).

The chart makes five important points about thesis statements, many of which I re-iterate in my own blog series about thesis and persuasive essay writing.

Check out the link. I did some investigating and could not source the owners of kibin.com, but the testimonials page -- https://www.kibin.com/testimonials -- demonstrates that Kibin has helped many people who speak highly of it.

I was impressed with the link of thesis statement examples because it began with a point I have emphasized that students often share a startling fact believing it works as a thesis statement. The page then shares twenty examples of thesis statement using questions as prompts. As shown in the chart, a thesis statement is not a question as it's a statement by definition in the term itself (IE. it's not called the "thesis question"). And so the page shows question prompts and the thesis statements that follow from those questions, such as

13. Should a relaxed dress code be allowed in the workplace?
A relaxed dress code is not appropriate in many business offices because it creates a relaxed and casual atmosphere which may cause customers to lose confidence in the business.
I like this example very much because the prompt question uses the verb "should" and the answer contains the word "because" and so it conforms to the "because-should" formula that I teach in my series, most notably in parts four and five (see links below also).

I harp on my "because-should" formula a lot with my students as I consider it an easy, plug-and-play method for roughing out an effective persuasive thesis statement in problem-solution form with an essay map that will pass the five tests (see part five).

I am always careful to emphasize that my "because-should" formula is NOT the only way to construct an effective thesis, but that it is one way and it works well for 99% of subjects and situations.

I also like the following prompt and thesis example because it keys into the subject of parenting, which is a subject choice for some of my current students:

6. Should all high school students be required to complete parenting classes?
In order to both educate teens about life as a parent and to help prevent teenage pregnancy, high school students should be required to complete parenting classes.
Though the thesis does not use a "because" clause, the reasons are still outlined in the first part of the sentence, flagged by "in order," which serves the same purpose. The second part of the thesis argues for a solution, the "should" clause, exactly as I establish in my "because-should" formula.

Though some of the thesis statements (like these two shared here on this entry) are better than others, there's lots of good stuff on this kibin page. I have vetted it with a thumbs up.



As I just noted, some pages on the Internet are helpful, and I can give my whole approval for them, and others are not as good and they advise things that are not useful.

For instance, this is a good one


There are many great ideas on this page, including notes on making thesis statements more specific, multiple ways to brainstorm a thesis, and even my favorite analogy, which is the claim made to be proven in a court of law.

In a basic Google search of "academic persuasive essay writing thesis," most of the top results will be from .edu cites (with kibin being the one of two non- .edu site in the first seven results). I wish my blog series rated higher in this search result. Sadly, my blog appears nowhere in the first 100 or so (nine pages) results.

I am less crazy about this one below, more because of the tired, old advice about a restatement of the thesis and a summary conclusion than anything else. The page offers some good advice, but it's not laid out as well as the uiowa.edu page and had less detailed thesis advice.



Sometimes, writing the essay first helps.

I used to advise students to do a very rough draft of an essay first by spilling all ideas about a subject onto the page and let the flow of words help the development of ideas and the discovery of a thesis.

However, often students attempt to submit this work for credit rather than re-working it an re-organizing it.

I plan to write more on this subject and introductions in the next installment.


The persuasive essay series I have written originated with lecture notes for my classes. Some of the format of the text reads more like notes than like an essay-style description and explanation.

Here are the links to the previous seven installments of this feature.

How to Write a Persuasive Essay Part One - First post in the series. Features a general introduction and the basic step-by-step process for developing a persuasive essay. There are also an assortment of helpful links to resources. Also, my clarification on the words subject and topic appears here.

How to Write a Persuasive Essay Part Two - This one covers finding a subject for a persuasive essay and some brainstorming ideas - research first!

How to Write a Persuasive Essay Part Three - Part three discusses analyzing a subject to produce the problem-solution structure that works best for persuasive essays. The post considers how audience impacts this work and then an example of the process is shown.

How to Write a Persuasive Essay Part Four - Here, in part four, I begin a two part discussion of my because-should thesis formula. I describe basic ideas about thesis, how my because-should form works, and then deliver several thesis examples with the form and without the form.

How to Write a Persuasive Essay Part Five - Part five continues to describe my because-should thesis formula. I share the benefits of the formula and the five tests of a good thesis.

How to Write a Persuasive Essay Part Six - In parts six and seven, I bust myths related to essay writing and English composition in general. Part six tells the truth (negates stupidity) about use of first and second person pronouns in essays, and the stand against using Wikipedia. 

How to Write a Persuasive Essay Part Seven - In part seven, I tear off the cover on the concept of "maximum lengths" in essay writing and the use of tired, old summary conclusion.

How to Write a Persuasive Essay Part Eight - In part eight, I share more samples analyses for essay ideas with rough outlines of topic sentences and paragraphs.




I plan to make some You Tube videos. Right now, my instructional videos are on other subjects as well as some cute dog videos and my Spider-Man poem video which I share again here after the link to my You Tube Channel.



Reflect and connect.

Have someone give you a kiss, and tell you that I love you.

I miss you so very much, Mom.

Talk to you tomorrow, Mom.


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- Bloggery committed by chris tower - 1705.31 - 10:10

NOTE on time: When I post late, I had been posting at 7:10 a.m. because Google is on Pacific Time, and so this is really 10:10 EDT. However, it still shows up on the blog in Pacific time. So, I am going to start posting at 10:10 a.m. Pacific time, intending this to be 10:10 Eastern time. I know this only matters to me, and to you, Mom. But I am not going back and changing all the 7:10 a.m. times. But I will run this note for a while. Mom, you know that I am posting at 10:10 a.m. often because this is the time of your death.
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